http://ibuberu.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] ibuberu.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] southofreality 2010-07-16 12:28 pm (UTC)

I really liked 1 and 3! Both really showed Green's character, and I found the setting just interesting and amazing at the same time. I loved how you related Silver to Green, and the fact that Silver is technically a thief was acknowledged, the scenario just fitted perfectly and flowed so nicely. Silver's explanation in particular was touching. Oh and the Hibiki/Breeder part was wonderful too. I liked the little chemistry they had going on, and how Hibiki's childlike innocence is sort of the reason why he understands Green.

And 5 just fueled the RedGreen fangirl within me! I like how you pulled off Red's silent character, as always. Though the line 'Red's appropriately red eyes' sounds a bit weird, maybe somewhat redundant? I don't really know how to express it really. Perhaps 'Red's appropriately coloured eyes' or 'Red's appropriately namesake eyes' may fit better but that's just a tiny suggestion.

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